Far beyond the edge of the world is my beautiful place....My beautiful place is a golden palace with bright golden statues with pots of gold next to it. Outside my house was a yellow Lamborghini in the garage with some other cool cars of mine.
I could hear the squawking of my eagle from the back of my house. My pet animal is half rhino and half eagle. At night we could sometimes hear the noise of my annoying eagle.
My waitress smells and looks as gorgeous as a flower.My waitress makes one of the most delightful brownies in the entire world. The brownies are perfectly cooked.
I always ride on my unicorn around my house.My unicorn is as fury as a panda and a polar bear. I can feel the soft fur between my finger tips. My wardrobe has over a thousand items of clothing in it. My bed is as big as a elephant’s body. I like my bed so much because my bed is magnetic.
I smell the richness of my beautiful blossom berries from my berry bush. I could also smell the richness of the tendering flowers.
I hope you liked my story thank you for reading about my beautiful place .
I really like the way you tried hard to make sure your paragraphs had one main idea Lyric. This meant that your description could flow. I also liked when you used alliteration in the phrase "beautiful blossom berries." Well done!
ReplyDeletei REALLY LIKE THE WSAY YOU WROTE ABOUT REALLY NMICE PLACES THAT YOU LIKE.I like that you write what kind of sound that you can HEAR,what you can SEE and other things.
ReplyDeleteNext time can you put a photo of your Beauitful Place